Some people believe the government should spend money on building trains and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion
The community is suffering from
traffic
congestion and they think
about solutions to solve Wrong verb form
are thinking
this
issue. Some suggest that building trains and subway lines will help reduce the number of cars. Others believe expand
and Wrong verb form
expanding
build
more streets will lead to better Wrong verb form
building
roads
. This
essay agrees with the two
points of view and will discuss them, I will also
give a resoanable
conclusion.
On the Correct your spelling
reasonable
one
side, spending money on building various types of public transports
will help reduce Fix the agreement mistake
transport
the
Correct article usage
apply
traffic
congestion. When people
do not focus on using one
type of vehicles
, Fix the agreement mistake
vehicle
this
helps to avoid the crowds in all vehicles and roads
. Providing trains and subway lines also
allows people
travel
faster, Fix the infinitive
to travel
easily
and Correct word choice
and easily
reduce
the danger and Correct subject-verb agreement
reduces
traffic
of the travel
routes. For instance
, after building trains
links between Europe and British, Change the noun form
train
english
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English
people
rely more on them to travel
around Europe, then
the travel
routes becoming
mainly for trucks. Wrong verb form
become
As a result
, public transports help government
to solve Add an article
the government
traffic
problems.
On the other side, expanding roads
will also
help decrease traffic
jams because smaller and narrow roads
causes
a lot of accidents and Change the verb form
cause
traffic
problems. With wider roads
there will be Add a comma
roads,
two
ways in one
street one
for going and another for coming back, and people
will drive regularly and safely far from the randomness. For example
, if there is one
narrow road for two
different destinations, you will find traffic
jams caused by accidents. As a result
, wider roads
make the
cars Correct article usage
apply
movement
easily.
In conclusion, the Correct your spelling
move more
goverment
has Correct your spelling
government
two
solutions to save people
's lives from problems that came
from Wrong verb form
come
traffic
congestion, they can provide variety
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a variety
types
of public Change preposition
of types
transports
to help reduce the crowds. They can Fix the agreement mistake
transport
also
adjust the routes to ensure that cars will not cause any damage.Submitted by danall1kat on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that all ideas are clearly and logically organized and connected. Although the essay covers both viewpoints, the connections between some ideas can be made stronger.
task achievement
Develop ideas more comprehensively, providing additional supporting details or examples. This would allow for a more in-depth analysis that fully engages with the topic.
task achievement
In the final conclusion, try to more explicitly state your preference or stance on the issue. Although both views are agreed with, clarifying your main viewpoint could strengthen your argument.
task achievement
The essay provides a balanced discussion of both views, showcasing a good understanding of the issue.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and well-integrated, helping frame the discussion concisely and effectively.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite