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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five British cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five British cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the outcome
about
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of
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 the habits of buying and drinking
tea
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 and
coffee
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 by citizens who live in
London
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,
Coventry
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,
Wales
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,
Sheffield
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, and
Oxford
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.
Overall
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, the proportion of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 is the lowest in each five cities. Except for in
Sheffield
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, the proportion of going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 is the highest in the rest of
four
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the four
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 cities in the British region. In terms of the percentage of buying fresh
coffee
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 in each city, it is over 40% in
London
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(around 44%) and
Coventry
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(around 42%). In
Wales
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,
Sheffield
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, and
Oxford
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, there were
less
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fewer
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people
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who prefer
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prefer
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preferred
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 buying fresh
coffee
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 than
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London
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in London
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 and
Coventry
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, which is about 36%, 34% and 38% respectively. Second,in
Sheffield
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, there were 50%
citizens
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of citizens
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 prefer to buy instant
coffee
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, which is more than buying fresh
coffee
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(around 33%) and going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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(around 38%). The proportion of
people
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 who bought instant
coffee
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 in
London
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 and
Coventry
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 is about 45% and 48%.
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, the
portion
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proportion
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 of
people
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live
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living
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 in
Wales
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(around 53%) and
Oxford
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(around 57%) is higher
50
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than 50
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%.
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, in
Sheffield
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, the percentage of citizens who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 is about 38%.
However
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, in the rest of the four cities,
London
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,
Coventry
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,
Wales
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, and
Oxford
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, is much higher than 60%, which is approximately 61%,63%,57%, and 64% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, london, coventry, wales, sheffield, oxford, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Survey results
  • Buying and drinking habits
  • British cities
  • Standout trends
  • Consumption
  • Preference
  • Purchasing trends
  • Retail outlets
  • Freshly brewed
  • Instant coffee
  • Urban preferences
  • Market
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