The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the popularity of
age-
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range
from Yemen and Italy in the years
of
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2000 and 2025.
Overall
, the population of Yemen and Italy saw
significan
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significant
distribution in ages,
while
Yemen’s population tend to be
progessively
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progressively
younger, Italy
experience
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an
aging
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range
.
Initially
, the
range
between the
range
15-
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and 59
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in Yemen managed to be the biggest and passed more than 60 around 20%. The people below 15
were
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accounted for only a minor percentage (5,7%) of the total
2050
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in 2050
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.
On the other hand
, in Italy, proportions for both
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an opposite tendency,
while
15
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-59
range
had steadily over 50 years from 61% in 2000 to only 46%, and over over 60
range
rised
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raised
risen
rose
significantly by that, from approximately 24% to peak at 43%.
In contrast
, there was
fluctated
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in the proportion of ages distributed in
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-14
range
from both
country
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countries
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.
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