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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three dif erent areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three dif erent areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words
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The provided line graph presents the amount of
wheat
 crop exported over the time span of 5 years from 1985 to 1990, from three
distintive
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distinctive
 regions(Australia,
Canada
 and
European
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the European
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 community). The information
exhibit
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 significant changes
of
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in
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export
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the export
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 industry.
In
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Overall
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overall
, it is evident that the trend of rise to fall and upsurge to decline was followed by Australia and Europe respectively.
While
,
Canada
 experienced fluctuation during the given period of time. In 1985, all three areas began exporting
with
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almost
same
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the same
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 quantity of
wheat
, with slight
difference
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differences
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 under 15 to 20. In the subsequent year,
Canada
,16 and Europe14
,
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 witnessed
decline
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a decline
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 in the export trend.
In contrast
, in 1986, Australia was providing more
wheat
 to other
counties
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countries
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 but
then
 it plummeted, reaching the number to 12 and became
lowest
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the lowest
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 producer of the particular crop.
Furthermore
,
Canada
 surpassed the trade of
wheat
 to 25 in 1988, by diverging from other areas with more than 10%.
However
, a drastic decline was faced by
Canada
's exporting companies
while
 European ones were at
the
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their
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 peak from 1989 to 1990.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • compare
  • pattern
  • peak
  • noteworthy
  • consistency
  • stability
  • overview
  • analyze
  • summarize
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