The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. The Relationship Between Age and Crime, last year Types of Property Crime in the UK, last year

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

The Relationship Between Age and Crime, last year

Types of Property Crime in the UK, last year
The line graph illustrates the
amount
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of
crimes
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people of different
age
group
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in
UK
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,
whereas
,
pie
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chart shows the different types of
crime
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in
last
year.
Overall
, it is evident that the majority of
crimes
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by individuals between the
age
group of 12 - 28, meanwhile, the violent
crime
had the highest proportion in the given year.
To begin
with, 80 thousand
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crime
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crimes
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people who are 20
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old,
while
at second with 70 thousand of
crime
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happened by
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adults of 16
age
. A very few number of
crimes
come
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account of children
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to
age
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group of 12.
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60 thousand
crimes
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to people
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age
24- 28. It can be seen that as the
age
increases the
crime
rate starts decreasing.
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slightly less than half a percentage of
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violent,
on the other hand
around a quarter of
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to property, and, a similar proportion are related to drugs. The public order
crime
had a very percentage accounted for only 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, age, crime with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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