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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. The Relationship Between Age and Crime, last year Types of Property Crime in the UK, last year

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. The Relationship Between Age and Crime, last year Types of Property Crime in the UK, last year
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The line graph illustrates the
amount
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 of
crimes
 done by
the
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people of different
age
group
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groups
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 in
UK
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the UK
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,
whereas
,
pie
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the pie
a pie
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 chart shows the different types of
crime
happened
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that happened
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 in
last
 year.
Overall
, it is evident that the majority of
crimes
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were preformed
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preformed
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performed
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 by individuals between the
age
 group of 12 - 28, meanwhile, the violent
crime
 had the highest proportion in the given year.
To begin
 with, 80 thousand
of
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crime
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crimes
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 were
done
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committed
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 by
the
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people who are 20
year
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years
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 old,
while
 at second with 70 thousand of
crime
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crimes
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 happened by
the
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adults of 16
age
. A very few number of
crimes
 come
in
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on
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 account of children
belong
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belonging
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 to
age
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the age
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 group of 12.
Moreover
,
with
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60 thousand
crimes
related
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are related
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 to people
of
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aged
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age
 24- 28. It can be seen that as the
age
 increases the
crime
 rate starts decreasing.
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,
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slightly less than half a percentage of
crimes
 are
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violent,
on the other hand
 around a quarter of
crimes
related
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are related
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 to property, and, a similar proportion are related to drugs. The public order
crime
 had a very percentage accounted for only 9%.
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