The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The bar chart gives information about the proportion of Australian males and females of various age groups who did regular physical activity in a single year.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that,
although
in all six age groups, girls exercised more than boys with the exception of those who were between 15 and 24 years old, they had very similar exercise habits.
Moreover
, the reverse pattern was observed: for boys, the trend fell
then
rose, and vice versa for girls. The only period that the participation level of men was greater than women was between 15 to 24 years old (52.8% as opposed to 47.7%). As for women, the highest percentage, amounting to 53.3%, those who aged between 45 to 54 exercised, with men's level of participation was significantly lower (just above 43%).
As a result
, the difference between the contribution of females and males in the periods that females had more desire, was at least 0.4% and at most 13%.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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