Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In recent years, the number of violent
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among
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rise
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significantly.
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to conclude
that lack of
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from
parents
and teachers
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the main issue of the increasing levels of
youth
crime
.
However
, I strongly agree with
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of figures at home and
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environment
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youth
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the
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and
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towards other
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children
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I had tried to mimic my mother doing laundry and cooking at that time.
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to take care of house chores in the future. So that,
children
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from their
parents
will behave
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their
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Furthermore
, a place with a high
crime
rate
also
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a negative
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to
children
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which place is safe to live with
children
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children
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place with a lot of crimes will have a big chance to conduct
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,
such
as
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In other words
,
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environment
leads
children
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people
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behavior
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in everyday life. To summarize,
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of figures at home and
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surrounding
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youth
behavior
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Parents
and
people
with
children
must give
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clear
guidances
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, show their figures as older
people
, and protect their
children
from bad
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environments
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This
will lead
children
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spared from
youth
crimes and other bad things that could happen to them.
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