Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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crimes
youth
under the age of 18 Add a missing verb
has rise
rise
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risen
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has led psychologist
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psychologists
to conclude
that lack of guidances
from Fix the agreement mistake
guidance
parents
and teachers are
the main issue of the increasing levels of Correct subject-verb agreement
is
youth
crime
. However
, I strongly agree with this
viewpoint because lack
of figures at home and Correct article usage
the lack
surrounding
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the surrounding
environment
will affect youth
behavior
.
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behaviour
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build
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builds
children
’s act
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actions
behavior
towards other Change the spelling
behaviour
people
. Most children
usually learn from their parents
actions. Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
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, as a child
I had tried to mimic my mother doing laundry and cooking at that time. Add a comma
child,
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build
my Change the verb form
builds
confident
to take care of house chores in the future. So that, Replace the word
confidence
children
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guidance
parents
will behave irresponsibility
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irresponsibly
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in
life
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lives
Furthermore
, a place with a high crime
rate also
bring
a negative Change the verb form
brings
environment
to children
. People
must considers
which place is safe to live with Change the verb form
consider
children
. For example
, a
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apply
children
who grow up in the
place with a lot of crimes will have a big chance to conduct Correct article usage
a
crime
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crimes
such
as stealling
. Correct your spelling
stealing
In other words
, surrounding
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the surrounding
environment
leads children
or people
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people's
behavior
in everyday life.
To summarize, Change the spelling
behaviour
lack
of figures at home and Correct article usage
the lack
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the surronding
surronding
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surrounding
environment
will affect youth
behavior
. Change the spelling
behaviour
Parents
and people
with children
must give a
clear Correct article usage
apply
guidances
, show their figures as older Fix the agreement mistake
guidance
people
, and protect their children
from bad environment
. Fix the agreement mistake
environments
This
will lead children
be
spared from Add the particle
to be
youth
crimes and other bad things that could happen to them.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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