The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.

The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great 

Britain in 1992.
The two pie charts illustrate some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.
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, the overwhelming majority of
female
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have 31 per
cent
of clerical or related in comparison with
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,
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compose 6 per
cent
. Craft or similar for female occupied 3 per
cent
,
whereas
for male
this
things was 24 per
cent
.
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, other manual and managerial and professional occupied for
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27 per
cent
and 29 per
cent
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although
for
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these both things had 26 per
cent
and 36 per
cent
. from
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point,
other manual
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for
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than
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but managerial and professional for
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higher
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than
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. Meanwhile, the lowest level occupied general labourers for
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with one per
cent
because
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have more than one per
cent
. other
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have 9 per
cent
for
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in comparison with
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,
whose
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occupied just 6 per
cent
, which means other
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were higher for
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.
It is clear that
the 3 things(clerical or related, other manual, other non-manual) for
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higher
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than for
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but residuary(managerial and professional, craft or similar, general labourers) for
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higher
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than
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