The graph below shows the percentage of the population in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 and 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below shows the percentage of the population in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 and 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The line graph shows data about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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, Thailand and
Indonesia
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in the period 1970 to 2020, with predictions for
next
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the next
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20 years.
Overall
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, during
this
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fifteen-year period,
Malaysia
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remained the biggest number of citizens, with all three other countries having much less urban population than it. In 1970
Indonesia
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had the least amount of people living in cities,
while
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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and
Malaysia
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were urbanized as much as each other.
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by
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apply
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, by 2015, the gap between Thailand and
Malaysia
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had narrowed and considerably more amount of people lived in cities in
Indonesia
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than
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this
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these
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two. As can be seen from the graph, the
percent
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percentage
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of citizens living in
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this
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these
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four regions will be increased but it rose dramatically in
Indonesia
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and
Malaysia
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.
The
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period between 1990 and 2010 Philippines
lose
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lost
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its number of citizens but it started
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to rise
and will continue rising slightly.
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