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A friend from another coutry moving to your city for work. he asked you to advise about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1. suggest an interesting part of the city to live in. 2. describe the public transport in your city. 3. say how your friend can meet new people there.

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Dear Vasile, I am happy to hear that you have a plan of moving
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 my city for work. I’d have
pleasure
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helping
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 you. Here are
a
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some things for you to learn and to adapt, but don’t worry, because you’ll be able to get used to it quickly.
Altough
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, you should take
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etiquette
in
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 consideration for gaining citizens’ respect for now. Let’s start with the best part of the city to live. I recommend you the suburbs. The suburbs are the most
pitoresque
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picturesque
 and quiet places. The suburbs are efficient and have all kinds of products you need for surviving and are near the Chișinău downtown. The public transport isn’t the best
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 but is very
accesible
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accessible
 and neat, most
it
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 comes fast and on time. The most common transports here are trolleybuses and microbuses,
otherwise
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 trolleybuses are the most preferred ones. You can meet new people
everytime
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 here, the majority of people here are kind and honest, of
course
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 you should be the same. In conclusion, Moldova is
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 place to live, people are quite friendly and the prices are okay.
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suitable writing tone
Try to maintain a consistent tone throughout your letter. Your tone is friendly and appropriate overall, but maintaining this throughout will improve clarity and engagement.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve coherence. The paragraph about city parts and transport feels mixed; separating them could enhance clarity.
greeting and closing
You have written a friendly greeting and a clear closing, framing your letter well.
complete response
Your task achievement is strong as you have addressed all the requested points in your letter, giving a good overall response to the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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