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The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should n

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should n
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The table illustrates how much
highschool
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high school
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 teachers earned money in 5 major
countries
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 in 2009.
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According to the
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The
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 table
it
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apply
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compares 5
diffrent
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different
countries
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 in
the
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apply
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term
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terms
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 of how it started, after 15
years
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,
maximum
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the maximum
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salary
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 and
years
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 spent to reach the highest
salary
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.
It is clear that
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highest
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the highest
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salary
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 is in three
countries
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: Luxembourg, Japan,
Korea
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and Korea
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 those
countries
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 are
on
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at
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 the top apart from
others
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the others
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. Luxembourg
have
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highest
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the highest
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salary
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 for teachers and
have
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has
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 the highest payment of all
countries
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, it spent 30
years
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 to achieve the highest payment.
However
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, those
countries
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 spent much longer time even though three of them had bigger
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salary
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salaries
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. Australia and Denmark
that
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which
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 spent around 9 and 8
years
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 compared to
other
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the other
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 three
countries
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 had the fastest growth of payment in time less than 15
years
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, years, salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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