The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
male
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the male
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population with smoking habit in seven different countries in two
variount
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various
variant
periods.
Overall
,
percentage
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the percentage
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of males who smoke decreased, which was around 43% in 2000 and
then
it declined to reach approximately 33% in 2015. In regard to countries which have a
drope
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drop
on
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its percentage, Bangladesh had the highest gap with over 60%
smoker
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smokers
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in 2000 and the percentage went down to reach almost 39% in 2015.
In addition
, America,Mexico and Australia
also
had a
decreased
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in male smoking
whith
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with
12%,15% and 11% , respectively. Cuba showed no significant difference in the proportion of male smoking in the country with a
slightly
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decline
around
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of around
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only 2%.
According to
the countries which had an increase in
smokin
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smoking
numbers, Egypt was the highest which became 49% .
additionally
, Lebanon had 35% of male smokers in 2000 and following that it had rocketed to reach 44% in 2015.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart, percentage, adult male smokers
  • world average, increased, decreased
  • tobacco consumption, lung cancer
  • public health, awareness campaigns
  • government policy, smoking bans
  • health risks, nicotine, tobacco industry
  • chart analysis, data comparison
  • statistical trend, significant fluctuation
  • stagnation, steady rise, moderate fall
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