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The chart below displays the percentage of household in owned and rented accommodation in England and Whales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below displays the percentage of household in owned and rented accommodation in England and Whales between 1918 and 2011.
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This
 essay represents the percentage of people who hired or bought
the
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 house in England
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,
quantity
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the quantity
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 of
resident
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residents
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in owned households
accommodation
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 speedily than rented accommodation which dramatically . 1918 the
occupied
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 was lifted
about
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 78% percent.
Then
 it matched between 1939 to 1953. From 1961 to 1981 it significantly decreased to 35
percentage
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. In 2011 there was a slight go up in rented households and it was up to 38% . The same
yeas
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 the owned ones
has
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 shot up from 21%
32
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% in 1918 to 1958.
Then
 it leveled
of
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 between 1939 to 1953 the was a graduate stade in the percentage.
Then
 it starts to move upward to 69% in the 1991.
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 2001 to 2011 there was a plummet in the owned quarters and it was 62% Generally, both
of
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rented and owned
has
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 skyrocketed and dropped
though
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 the years from 1918 to 2011 .
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