The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration describes the population of enrollees at Manchester Unversity on periods; 1937, 1967 and 2017,
as well as
the category and percentage per group.
Overall
, the largest number
of freshmen came from year
2017. Meanwhile, the Change the article
the year
least
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lowest
number
of neew
comers was Correct your spelling
new
on
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in
year
1937.
The highest Change the article
the year
number
of new students was on year
2017 with 6254 in total number
. It was almost six times higher compared to previous
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the previous
on
1967 with 1133 enrollees. Change preposition
in
However
, there were small
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a small
the small
number
of people who enrolled during 1937 with only 327 in total
population.
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the total
Additionally
, from 1937 to 1967 most of the aspiring students were males with 55 to 65 percent of their respective total popuation
each Correct your spelling
population
year
. Meanwhile, during
2017 the component of Change preposition
in
male
category declined, as evidenced by 45% of the component.
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the male
On the other hand
, the largest number
of female enrollees rose during 2017 with 55% on data. However
, during
1937 and 1967 there were only Change preposition
between
few
female freshmen with 35 to 45 Change the article
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percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
population
.
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the population
Moreover
, most of the new scholars during 1937 came within the 40 miles
distance from Manchester with 55%. Correct your spelling
40-mile
However
, during
1967 and 2017 the Change preposition
between
number
of students within closed
proximity decreased five times with only 1% to 15% Replace the word
close
enrolleed
. Correct your spelling
enrolled
enrollees
Additionally
, a lot of the learners are international in origin from 102 countries with a recorded 32%.Submitted by emmagallares on
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