The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration describes the population of enrollees at Manchester Unversity on periods; 1937, 1967 and 2017,
as well as
the category and percentage per group.
Overall
, the largest
number
of freshmen came from
year
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2017. Meanwhile, the
least
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number
of
neew
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new
comers was
on
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year
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1937. The highest
number
of new students was on
year
2017 with 6254 in total
number
. It was almost six times higher compared to
previous
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period
on
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1967 with 1133 enrollees.
However
, there were
small
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number
of people who enrolled during 1937 with only 327 in
total
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population.
Additionally
, from 1937 to 1967 most of the aspiring students were males with 55 to 65 percent of their respective total
popuation
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population
each
year
. Meanwhile,
during
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2017 the component of
male
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category declined, as evidenced by 45% of the component.
On the other hand
, the largest
number
of female enrollees rose during 2017 with 55% on data.
However
,
during
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1937 and 1967 there were only
few
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female freshmen with 35 to 45
percent
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of
population
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the population
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.
Moreover
, most of the new scholars during 1937 came within the
40 miles
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40-mile
distance from Manchester with 55%.
However
,
during
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1967 and 2017 the
number
of students within
closed
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proximity decreased five times with only 1% to 15%
enrolleed
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enrolled
enrollees
.
Additionally
, a lot of the learners are international in origin from 102 countries with a recorded 32%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • increase/decrease in student numbers
  • post-war baby boom
  • globalization
  • technological advancement
  • education accessibility
  • demographic changes
  • overseas students
  • gender representation in education
  • international reputation
  • higher education
  • university capacity
  • social factors
  • economic influences
  • political factors
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