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the plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided maps illustrate the main alterations of a harbour over a 24-year period from 2000 to the present.
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, it can be observed that Porth Harbour has undergone construction and expansion in order to promote tourism and commercial activities in the area. Regarding
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the plans, plenty of facilities for the convenience and involvement of visitors have been built and reconstructed. Taken together, the predominant changes occurred
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 the former disused castle by renovating it into
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 contemporary hotel with
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 private beach. The establishment of patios, markets and a road beside the guesthouse has advanced the place into
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 cultural and touristic hotspot. On closer examination
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 the northern and western parts of the latter map, the number of docks, passenger ferries, restrooms and shower stalls has clearly increased. Interestingly, the use of water zones
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 fishing vessels and
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, where
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private yachts can be hired, have been interchanged. It can be attributed to the easy accessibility to the private yachts for sightseers in the guesthouse, which
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Task Achievement
Ensure the introduction briefly restates the topic to provide a clearer context for readers unfamiliar with the maps.
Task Achievement
Consider providing more specific quantitative changes (e.g., specific number of docks or facilities increased) where possible to add depth to your comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to aid the reader in understanding the overall structure of the essay more easily.
Task Achievement
The essay demonstrates a strong understanding of the changes in the harbour, effectively summarizing the transformation with a clear overview.
Task Achievement
It incorporates specific details such as the interchange of water zones and the development of cultural facilities, enhancing the richness of the descriptions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas are logically structured and flow well from one to the next, making the essay easy to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay clearly presents an introduction and conclusion, summarizing the main points effectively.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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