The linegrahp below shows the differences in the consumption of three fast food among Australian teenager. Write a report describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.

The given line graph
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compares
compare
compars
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compares
the amount of eaten fast food by Australian teenagers over
twenty-five
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the twenty-five
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years time period between 1975 and 2000
Overall
, The three trends experienced different indicators.
While
consumption
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the consumption
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of Hamburgers and
Pizza
rose sharply, the
consumption
of Fish and Chips fell over
time
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a time
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period. As the graph shows,
consumption
of the Fish and Chips started at 100 in 1975 followed by a small decrease to about 82 in 1980.
Then
, it rose slowly to
raughtly
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roughly
87 in 1985.Afterwards,
this
figure declined to exactly 40 in 2000. Regarding
Pizza's
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Pizza
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consumption
, in 1975 Tenageers ate approximately 8
number of
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pizzas
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pizza
.Afterwards, the number of
eaten
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people who ate
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pizza
increased
dromatically
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dramatically
to just over 80 in
twenty
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the
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years
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twenty-year
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time period between 1975 and 1995.
Then
, the figure levelled off at about 83 until 2000.
By contrast
, the
consumption
of hamburgers experienced an increase between 1975 and 1985.In 1985, approximately 84 hamburgers were eaten.
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,
this
trend slowed down and reached 100 in 1995.Afterwards, the trend was reminded until 2000.
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coherence
Revise key language points and rephrase sections. Use transition words effectively and avoid redundant phrases for clarity.
task response
Ensure clearer task completion. Provide the pizza trend inflection point, use consistent time periods for stronger, relevant arguments.
coherence
The essay provides a general overview of trends observed in the line graph, presenting an overall understanding of the data.
task response
Main trends of each fast food category are described with specific figures from different time periods, effectively linking them to the line graph provided.

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