The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60 - 64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Two
diagrams below illustrate the number of employers who keep working Correct article usage
The two
in
the age Change preposition
between
between
60 and 64 years old in four countries from 1970 to 2000. Change preposition
of
Overall
, the percentage
of men dramatically exceeds the percentage
of women.
According to
the first chart, the percentage
of workers has remarkably grown for thirty years since it was recorded in 1970. Especially, in Belgium, the transformation is the most significant with 80% has been escalated. However
, there are no countries whose quantity of female workers is as high as Japan. The proportion in other countries is quite similar.
Following the next chart, the percentage
of employers in Belgium is lowest with
7% in 1970 and one more Change preposition
at
percent
in 2000. Change the spelling
per cent
In addition
, the Japanese have reached the top once again with 43% in 2000 and the USA is still in the second stage in the same year despite the reduction. In contrast
, the trend of working at retirement age decreased in Australia, down to 2%.
In conclusion, men tend to work longer than women. Moreover
, the more old people continue work
, the more the lack of young Fix the infinitive
to work
labor
.Change the spelling
labour
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