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The given table illustrates the data on the population, GDP and life expectancy per capita of four countries.

The given table illustrates the data on the population, GDP and life expectancy per capita of four countries.
The given table illustrates the data on the
population
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,
GDP
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 per
capita
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 , and
life
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expectancy
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 of four different
countries
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. It is clear from the table that China and the USA have the biggest
population
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 and China has the lowest
GDP
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, and the USA has the lowest average
life
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expectancy
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 among all the
countries
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.
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, the UK have the highest average
life
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expectancy
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. China has the biggest
population
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 of 1,357,000,000 among
the
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all
countries
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while
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 having the lowest
GDP
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 per
capita
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 of 6,807 US dollars.
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, the
population
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 of the USA is 3,18,875,000 with the highest
GDP
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 per
capita
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 among all
countries
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 of 53,681, and the lowest
avarage
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average
life
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expectancy
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 of 69.2. The average
life
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expectancy
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 of the UK is the highest among all the
countries
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 and
that is
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 81.5. Rusia has 14,987 US dollars
GDP
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 per
capita
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, gdp, capita, life, expectancy, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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