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task 1 The linegrahp below shows the differences in the consumption of three fast food among Australian teenager. Write a report describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.

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The line graph compares three types of fast food consumption between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
, pizza,
fish
 and
chips
, and hamburgers experienced different trends in the time period.
While
 pizza and hamburgers increased gradually, the
fish
 and
chips
 fell over time. As the graph shows, the number of people who ate pizza was about 10 times in 1975 followed by a steady growth to around 85 from 1980 to 1995.
Whereas
,
this
 figure remained the same at 85 until the end. Regarding to rate of hamburgers, in 1975 there were approximately 15 times per year.
Then
, it rose sharply to 85 in 1985. Afterwards, the figure rocketed rapidly to 100 in 2000.
By contrast
, the trend of
fish
 and
chips
 experienced a decrease
through
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 the 25 years. In 1975, it has been eaten 100 times,
whereas
this
 number went down to just over 80 in 1980.
Then
, it climbed slowly to 95 in 1985. In the next decade, the trend of
fish
 and
chips
 plunged to 38 per year.
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task achievement
Ensure the introduction provides a clear and concise overview of what the graph represents to set the context for your report.
coherence cohesion
Consider adding a conclusion to sum up the main trends and differences observed in the data.
coherence cohesion
Strive for cohesion and flow in linking your observations about each fast food type to enhance clarity and readability.
task achievement
You've succeeded in identifying and highlighting the main trends effectively.
coherence cohesion
Main points are supported with data and examples from the graph, helping to illustrate the changes in fast food consumption.

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