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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given map illustrates how a harbour has changed between 2000 and now, over a period of 25 years. In general terms, it can be clearly seen that a harbour dramatically modernized.
In addition
, it is noticeable that plenty of facilities
such
 as cafes, and hotel were introduced. Looking at the picture in more detail, in 2000, there was only one car park
at the end
 of
little
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the little
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 path.
By contrast
, one more path was constructed
as well as
car
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a car
the car
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 park and toilets within
shower
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the shower
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 facility. In the meantime, fishing boats and private yachts switched
position
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positions
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 and the number
ferries
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of ferries
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 for
passenger
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passengers
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 and
dock
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docks
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 increased to three and two each.
At the end
 of the sub-road, as the castle which was being disused
replaced
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and replaced
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 by a private hotel,
public
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the public
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 beach transformed
to
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into
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private
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a private
the private
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 beach, only accessible
for
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to
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 hotel residents. Meanwhile, cafes and shops
was
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were
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 newly opened right left to the lifeboat station.
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coherence cohesion
Work on sentence structure and grammar to express ideas more clearly. For instance, restructuring some sentences can enhance clarity, such as "In the meantime, fishing boats and private yachts switched position..." which could be made clearer with a bit more context or rephrasing.
task response
Include more detailed comparisons and enhancements in the essay to fully cover all significant changes in the harbour. Adding more specific examples can enrich your narrative and improve clarity for the reader.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases more effectively to enhance flow. Connectors such as "however," "furthermore," "in addition to that," can help improve coherence by guiding the reader through the essay's logical progression.
introduction conclusion present
The opening paragraph provides a clear overview of the changes in the harbour over the specified time period, which adequately sets up the following details.
complete response
The essay effectively outlines the changes made to the facilities and amenities in the harbour, highlighting significant developments such as cafes and a hotel.
task response
An effort to use comparative language, such as "By contrast," shows an understanding of key comparison requirements for task achievement.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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