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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.

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The given map illustrates how a harbour has changed between 2000 and 2024, over a period of 24 years. In general terms, it can be clearly seen that a harbour was dramatically modernized.
In addition
, it is noticeable that plenty of facilities
such
 as cafes and
hotle
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hotel
hotels
 were introduced. Looking at the picture in more detail, in 2000, there was only one car park
at the end
 of
little
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 path, compared to one more path was constructed
as well as
 the car park and toilets within
shower
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 facility. In the meantime, fishing boats and private yachts
swiched
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switched
position
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positions
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.
Furthermore
, the number of ferries for passengers and
dock
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 increased to three and two each.
At the end
 of the sub-road, as the catle which
was
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had
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 been disused
replaced
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 by a
pirvate
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private
 hotel, a public beach transformed
to
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private
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a private
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 beach, only
accesible
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accessible
for
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to
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 hotel residents. Meanwhile, cafes and shops were newly opened right left
to
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of
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 the lifeboat station.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure transitions between sentences and paragraphs are smoother to enhance flow.
Task Response
Use clearer and more specific examples to illustrate the major changes.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that ideas are expressed comprehensively and clearly, paying attention to grammatical accuracy and variety.
Coherence and Cohesion
Conclude your report with a brief summary or concluding statement.
Task Response
The report effectively identifies the major changes in the harbour.
Task Response
The descriptions are generally accurate and provide a good overview of the changes.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction provides a suitable overview of the changes over time.

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