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Postponement, or the act of delaying a task, has been cited in some research articles as one of the factors for poor academic performance by some university students. What are some of the reasons behind students procrastinating, and what measures can be taken to address the problem?

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Some research articles
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 mentioned that
procrastination
 is one of the
factor
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factors
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 for
lack
academic
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of academic
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 performance by some
clollege
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college
students
.
This
 essay will examine some factors why
are
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students
 have
tendency
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a tendency
the tendency
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 to delay a
task
 and how to prevent that
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problem
.
To begin
 with, there are numerous reasons why
students
 have
procrastination
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habits
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.
Firstly
,
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the Impact
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 of
technology
:
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 of
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 has extended to almost
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every level
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 of our daily basis, its undeniable that
technology
 brings both
positif
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positive
 and negative impacts. One of the
drawback
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drawbacks
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 impact of
technology
 is distraction.
For example
, with an advance
of
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technology
,
such
 as a smartphone, there are many applications that can be installed, from social media, games, and other applications which can distract someone's attention.
Then
,
lack
 of motivation: many
students
unmotivated
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are unmotivated
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due to
lack
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a lack
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 of interest in the subjects or
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awarness
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awareness
 of
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their
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 importance, leading to postponement. Some possible solutions to
this
 problem are time
managent
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management
 skills and setting realistic goals.
By teaching
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students
 how to manage time as well
by
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as
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 prioritizing
task
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tasks
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 and breaking down them
to
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into
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 small
task
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tasks
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 can keep them motivated, leading to
reduce
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reduced
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procrastination
.
Additionally
, student can
encourage
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through state
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by stating
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the
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 realistic
goal
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 can help to maintain progress, leading to
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the postponement of
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 their
task
. In conclusion, an advance
of
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in
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technological
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technology
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 and
lack
 of motivation are some reasons
of
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for
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procrastination
,
however
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however,
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this
 issue can
adress
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address
through acknowledge
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by acknowledging
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students
 how to manage their time and set realistic goals.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Work on enhancing your sentence structure and syntax. Ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and not fragmented or awkwardly structured.
Task Achievement
Expand on your examples to make them more specific and relevant. Instead of stating general benefits or problems, detail them with particular scenarios or evidence.
Coherence & Cohesion
The introduction clearly sets the stage for the discussion and the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points raised.
Task Achievement
The essay recognizes and addresses both the causes and potential solutions for procrastination among students.

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