The line graph below show the changes in UK birth rate in 6 different age groups from 1973 to 2008.

The line graph below show the changes in UK birth rate in 6 different age groups from 1973 to 2008.
The line graph compares the shifts in the
birth
rate
across six diverse
age
categories in the United Kingdom during the period from 1973 to 2008.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the greatest decline was seen among younger
women
,
while
that of
women
in their thirties remains more stable.
This
trend suggests potential changes in social factors affecting childbearing decisions in the UK. The
birth
rates declined for all
age
groups
except 30-35-year-olds between 1973 and 2008. The steepest decline in
birth
rate
was seen among teenagers (under 20), which fell from nearly 60 per 1,000
women
in 1973 to less than 10 per 1,000
women
in 2008. The figure for
women
aged 20-25
also
declined significantly, from around 90 per 1,000
women
in 1973 to under 40 per 1,000
women
in 2008. The
birth
rate
in
aged
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30-35 group fluctuated slightly but remained
stably
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throughout the period, ranging between 70 and 80 per 1,000
women
. The figure for older
age
groups
(35-39, 40 and over)
also
declines, but at a slower
rate
than younger
age
groups
. Moving on to the rest, the significant decline in
birth
rates among teenagers (under 20) and young adults (20-25) suggested a possible change in social attitudes or priorities in the UK. Factors
such
as educational attainment or career opportunities may be influencing decisions about childbearing in these
age
groups
. The relatively stable
birth
rate
for
women
aged 30-35 may indicate a trend towards
women
having children later in life.
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