The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last years. Discuss the causes and effect of this issue disturbing trend.
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last
few years, western society witnessed an improvement in the percentage of overweight Linking Words
children
by almost 20%. In Use synonyms
this
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obesity
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the obesity
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children
do not practise enough sport in their Use synonyms
day
, sitting all Use synonyms
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day
from home to school makes their Use synonyms
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movement
movements
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, which can lead to Change the word
slow
the
obesity. Correct article usage
apply
second,
modern transport encourages them to not walk and reach their destination by Linking Words
restting
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resting
restating
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benches, walking is Change noun form
vehicle
the
significant part Correct article usage
a
in
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of
humans
health that if anyone Change the noun form
human
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avoids
avoid
, it will back on them with different diseases. Correct pronoun usage
avoid it
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parents
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children
to school because they are more safe. Use synonyms
Finally
, fast food that nowadays Linking Words
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it
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unhealthy
way.
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an unhealthy
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school
should add a fitness class every Fix the agreement mistake
schools
day
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children
how to practise sports and its importance, Use synonyms
parents
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help by joining Linking Words
kids
in sports clubs. Use synonyms
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, every football club offer a small club for Linking Words
children
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problem
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through
adding safe and wider walking paths in Change preposition
by
nighbourhoods
and public streets. As for the Correct your spelling
neighbourhoods
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problem
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problem,
parents
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them lessons about the disadvantages of fast food eating. The community can Wrong verb form
giving
also
help by providing more healthy restaurants.
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children
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the bad habits that Change preposition
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children
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get
used to Change the form of the verb
getting
it
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apply
such
as sports they practise, transportation they depend on and daily food. We can help to decrease the large number by giving Linking Words
advices
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pieces of advice
bits of advice
for
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to
government
, schools and the most significant ones Correct article usage
the government
parents
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kids
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kid's
life
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lives
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