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The charts below provide information about the websites where consumers from Australia and New Zealand bought products in 2012, as well as their reasons for online shopping. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below provide information about the websites where consumers from Australia and New Zealand bought products in 2012, as well as their reasons for online shopping. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts depict how many Australians and New Zealanders visit local and international websites to purchase commodities and the table shows
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's purposes for shopping on the internet. In general, Whether Australians or New Zealanders, most of them use both local and international websites. the number of
people
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 from
Australia
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 accounts for 72% and the number of
people
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 from New
Zealand
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 is lower than the former, it is 65%.
On the other hand
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, the figures for users in New
Zealand
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 who respectively visit domestic (25%) and foreign (10%) pages are both larger in
Australia
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 (domestic ones 20%, and foreign ones 8%).
According to
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 the table, most consumers choose to go online, the major cause is they spend less money than in physical stores.
This
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 kind of reason comprises 57% in New
Zealand
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 and 53% in
Australia
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, followed by online purchasing convenience, which constitutes 24% in
Australia
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 and 22% in New
Zealand
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.
Then
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, the third rank is the quality of products,
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, the number of Australians (18%) who hold
this
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 purpose is bigger than New Zealanders (16%). Regarding "Other reasons", there are the same figures
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people
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 from both countries, they all
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make
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 up 5%.
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