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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the populationin four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the populationin four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The illustration shows the percentage of residents from four Asian countries;
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
,
Thailand
 and Indonesia which are living in the cities from
period
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the period
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of
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1970 to 2040.
Overall
,
the
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by the year 2040
Malaysia
has
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will have
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 the highest projected
of
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number of citizens
on
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in
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 the metropolitan. Meanwhile,
Thailand
 has the lowest expected of individuals who will reside
at
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in
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 the urban area. During 1970,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and
Malaysia
 got the highest data of people situated
at
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in
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 the
city
 with roughly more or equal to 30% of individuals. Continually,
Malaysia
's urban population consistently will rise until 2040 with
of
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80% , which is the biggest in data of inhabitants.
However
, the Philippines fluctuated ranking third
on
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in
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year
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the year
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 2040 with 50% on the number of occupants
at
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in
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 the
city
. On the one hand,
Thailand
 and Indonesia were nearly tied
on
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in
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 the period of 1970 with more than 10% but less than 20% of its residents lived
on
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in
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 the
city
.
However
, Indonesia's population
on
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in
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 the
city
growed
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grew
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 increasingly up till 2040 with 60% foreseen occupants
to
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in
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 the
city
 area.
Thailand
 remained
the
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at the
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 bottom among the four nations with only more than 40%
citizens
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of citizens
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on
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in
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 the
city
 by the year 2040.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, thailand, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage of the population
  • urbanization
  • trends
  • predictions
  • compare/comparisons
  • notable patterns
  • anomalies
  • rapid urbanization
  • relative stability
  • economic development
  • government policies
  • migration patterns
  • significant changes
  • ranking
  • urban population
  • overall trends
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