The graph below gives information about the percentage of the populationin four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the populationin four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  

Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart displays the percentage of the amount of people who lived in urban areas in the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia. From the 70s to 2020.
Also
, the prediction results
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2030 and 2040.
Overall
,
it is clear that
all four cities have shown an
increase
in the number of citizens who are living in them. And it is predicted that it will
increase
even more in the next 20 years. Looking at the information in more detail. In 1970 the country who has the highest population who lived in cities was Malaysia . With 30% of residents. And it kept increasing dramatically to reach 70% of the whole population.
In contrast
,
Philippines
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fluctuated
during
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1970 to 2010 at nearly 42% . And it is predicted that it will
increase
slightly in the few next years.
Moreover
, both Thailand and Indonesia were under 20% of residents
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living in cities.
However
, Indonesia has increased significantly to reach almost 50% of people who live in urban areas.
While
Thailand increased steadily in
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residents at 37%. Both countries were predicted to
increase
in the next 20 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage of the population
  • urbanization
  • trends
  • predictions
  • compare/comparisons
  • notable patterns
  • anomalies
  • rapid urbanization
  • relative stability
  • economic development
  • government policies
  • migration patterns
  • significant changes
  • ranking
  • urban population
  • overall trends
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