Task 1: (Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: (Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates some shifts of the information in three categories
population
growth
, average birth and
life
expectancy
in different incomes between 2002 and 2004 .
Overall
, as can be seen, Low
income
had the largest
population
.
While
high
income
had fewer Portion of percentage.
However
,
in
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average
population
growth
had nearly the same points in high and
middle
income
.
It is clear that
low countries had a significant
population
growth
in 2002 and 2004 from 1.8% to 200% .
Moreover
,the average of women births in both years was around 3.8 to 3.7 .
In addition
, the
life
expectancy
was the lowest percentage for two years
remained
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at the same point between 58.1 and 58.8 of
life
expectancy
while
in
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middle
and high were the biggest figures.
On the other hand
, for high and
middle
had nearly
same
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number in the two categories in the
middle
countries was dominant 2 years around 0.9% more than the high
income
was 0.8%. to 0.7% of
population
growth
.
In addition
, in the
middle
income
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the average birth per woman was bigger than in high countries.
Finally
, by 2002 and 2004 the
life
expectancy
was the highest number around 78.0 to 78.7.
while
In the
middle
were Fewer points.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, growth, life, expectancy, income, middle with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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