the graph gives information on the number of participants for different activities in melbourn in australia for the period from 2000 to 2020

the graph gives information on the number of participants for different activities in melbourn in australia for the period from 2000 to 2020
The line graph illustrates the percentage of
participants
for five different activities Thermoclub, Martial Arts, Amateur, Jointist,
Table
Tennis
, and Music performance between 2000 and 2020 at
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social center in Australia.
Overall
, Thermoclub and Martial Arts were almost
taking
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the same number over the period,
while
Table
Tennis
and Musical performance, which appeared at 25, underwent an increase
of
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participants
' number. The amateur dramatics was the only one which decreased during the period. In 2000, the number of people who participated in Thermoclub was 65,
although
it witnessed a
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decrease in 2010 to
become
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16. It increased again to reach approximately 70
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2020. Despite
the
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Martial Arts
kept
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almost the same value over the period, around 48, in 2015 it was overtaken by
Table
Tennis
activity to become the third common activity.
Table
Tennis
began with only 15
participants
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2000 and was the least common activity until 2005
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when Musical
performance
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appeared with almost no
participants
at all. both of them kept increasing to reach
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second and fourth place at 55 and 16
participants
respectively.
while
the amateur starts at 28, once only, increased slightly,
then
starts decreasing
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25. By 2020, it had reached less than 10
participants
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, table, tennis with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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