The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The diagram illustrates how
ethanol
, which is a biofuel product, is made.
Overall
, after
plants
receive enough sunlight and
carbon
dioxide
from vehicles, they grow and are collected by special machines.
Then
, after producing cellulose
by
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pre-processing
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the pre-processing
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stage, it undergoes
to
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processing with chemicals at
factory
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to produce sugars. These sugars are mixed with microbes to produce
ethanol
, which
used
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as fuel
to
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transportation means. Cars, planes, and different vehicles that use biofuel to operate produce a high amount of
carbon
dioxide
to
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environment
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.
Carbon
dioxide
is considered an essential nutrient or source of energy to
plants
, which they use
it
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with sunlight to grow. The grown
plants
are harvested by special vehicles or methods to go to
pre-processing
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the pre-processing
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stage, where the
plants
are converted to cellulose, which is the project
who
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will undergo to real process. After the processing, sugars are produced. At
this
stage, microbes are added to complete the production of biofuel,
ethanol
. After the
ethanol
is produced, it is used by many different transportation methods. To supply them with energy that
important
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to operate them,
which
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they
also
produce
carbon
dioxide
again.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol, plants, carbon, dioxide with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biomass
  • milling
  • fermentation
  • enzymes
  • distillation
  • dehydration
  • molecular sieves
  • denatured
  • ethanol
  • raw materials
  • sugarcane
  • corn
  • impurities
  • purified
  • distribution
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