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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago nad how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago nad how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The map illustrates a plan
of
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for
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public
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a public
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 library from 20 years ago and how it is now. In general, lots of changes occurred over
past
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the past
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 20 years. Almost every point
in
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on
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this
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 map has been changed.
Left
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 corner of the floor plan used to be the place for CDs, videos and computer games.
However
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, it changed to some child-related activities. These facilities for children were at the right corner of
this
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 place that has been transferred to the left corner. At the intersection of hallways, there were two tables and chairs that
have
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had
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 been omitted. At the bottom right of the figure, there was an enquiry desk that
has
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had
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 been modified to a cafe with a door
at
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on
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 the left side. some new facilities like self-service machines and
information
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an information
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 desk have been added to
this
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 place
at
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on
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 the eastern side of the library.
Finally
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, the section for adult fiction books and reading room
have
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 been changed to a section for reference books and computer room, respectively

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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