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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbinton, and planned future developement of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbinton, and planned future developement of the site.
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The given maps depict an industrial zone
on
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in
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 the
town
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 of Norbiton
,
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 and
managed
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manage
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 future changes
of
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in
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 the area.
Overall
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, the yard of factories will be reconstructed and become an urbanaside place with roundabouts and housings. In terms
precipitation
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, the
town
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 is located between a river which is located northern, and a main
road
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that
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which
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 is
placed
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located
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 southern. At the same time , the river is
being
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a border between the
town
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 and
a
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farmland.
While
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,
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the
town
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 has a roundabout in the centre which is linked
with
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to
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 the main
road
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.
Also
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, the cycle has
an
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another route which
towards
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to
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the east. Interestingly, in the centre, almost all sides of the
road
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is
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are
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arounded
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surrounded
 by the factories.
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, a future plan
is amounted
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amounts
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 from new places.All factories will be replaced and
built
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new housings. Shops will
locate
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be located
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 on the south-west side of the
town
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 near the old roundabout. Notably,
medical
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the medical
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 centre will stay near it, on the other side of the
road
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 between the old and a new roundabout which will be built on the part of the main
road
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. At the same moment,
will appear
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a school and a playground
eastern
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 near the east route. In the North will be constructed a new bridge and
a housings
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housing
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 on the other side of the river.
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