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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.  The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.  The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates spending 4 products in a
coffee
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 shop every weekday at a specific time.
Overall
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, as can be seen, most
people
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drink
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coffee
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 for the whole day compared to the others.
While
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 the Lowest type is
tea
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.
However
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,
pastries
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 and
sandwiches
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 had favourite in the
vary
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very
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 time.
It is clear that
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 before 10.30,
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in morningthe
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morningthe
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the
 morning more than 265 workers preferred to
drink
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coffee
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 and eat
pastries
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.
In addition
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, around 110 employees love drinking
tea
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. Half of them preferred to eat
sandwiches
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.
However
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 during time 10:30 to
2:30
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2,30,
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 most
people
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 drank
coffee
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 and ate
Sandwiches
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.
Moreover
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 from 50 to 95 workers preferred to
drink
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tea
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 and eat
pastries
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.
On the other hand
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, in the afternoon hours, before 5:30, significant
people
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 Love
drink
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tea
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 and eat
pastries
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.
while
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 Less 40 employes prefar
drink
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tea
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 and eat
Sandwiches
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.
At the end
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 of day most
people
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drink
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coffee
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 and eat
Sandwiches
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. Others from 80 to 75 eat
pastries
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 and
drink
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tea
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people, drink, tea, pastries, sandwiches with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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