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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following bar chart illustrates the approximate proportion of the world's illiteracy by both region and gender for the previous year.
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, it is fascinating to note that females dominated the highest rank compared to males during the previous year. Having a closer look at the chart, it is discernible that females in South
Asia
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, Arab States, and SUb-Saharan Africa were the highest whether from women's side or men's side,
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, in South
Asia
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, females reached the peak at nearly 55%, followed by Arab States and SUb-Saharan Africa at almost 50% and 49%, respectively,
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 for men, there was a massive jump compared to the other gender;
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, there was fluctuation among the three
countries
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. Turning to the remaining
countries
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, they could be described as the lowest compared to others, for women, it rocketed the most sharply in East
Asia
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/Oceania, Latin American/Caribbean, and developed
countries
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 from 20% to nearly 3%,
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 for men, it was not steadily it decreased in East
Asia
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/Oceania before it increased in Latin American/Caribbean,
while
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 in the development
countries
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 it was almost zero.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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