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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter - Introduce yourself - explain what is wrong with the furniture - say what action you would like the landlord to take.

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Dear Landlord,
This
 side Navdeep . Hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to express my
dissatisfication
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dissatisfaction
 regarding
furniture
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the furniture
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 I
recieved
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received
 in my apartment. Actually, when I
sit
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sat
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 on the
chair
 I
come
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came
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 to know that
left
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my left
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 leg
is
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was
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 broken
due to
 which I
unable
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am unable
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 to use
chair
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the chair
a chair
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.
In addition
 to
this
, there is
big
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a big
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 window in my room that
also
 I found broken , because of
this
 I hear loud noise
in
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at
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 night because construction work is going
next
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on next
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 to my room.
Therefore
 , I request you to have a look
on
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at
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this
 matter and provide me
new
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a new
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chair
 as I am
student
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a student
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 ,so I have to do
home work
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homework
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 and for
this
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this,
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 I need
chair
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a chair
the chair
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 for my study table. Looking Forward for your positive response .
your
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yours
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 sincerely, Navdeep
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Coherence and Cohesion
While the letter generally follows a logical structure, adding clearer links between sentences can enhance coherence. For example, clearly transitioning from the broken chair to the broken window might improve clarity.
Task Achievement
Be sure to expand on the issue to ensure the task is fully achieved. Describing how the broken window affects your daily life more vividly can help achieve this.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter has a clear introduction and closing, which helps to provide a complete and well-rounded communication.
Task Achievement
You have included a polite request for the landlord to take action, which is suitable for this type of formal letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rented accommodation
  • Tenancy
  • Malfunctioning
  • Worn-out
  • Broken
  • Inconvenience
  • Repair or replace
  • Urgency
  • Comfort
  • Safety
  • Budget
  • Specific property
  • Immediate action
  • Inadequate condition
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