The graph below shows the daily water consumption for Americans in their homes. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when necessary.

The graph below shows the daily water consumption for Americans in their homes.

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when necessary.
This
bar chart depicts a comparison of
water
uses
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use
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for
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by
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Americans in their home. It is measured by
gallons
of
water
.
Overall
as
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apply
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it can be clearly seen that
gallons
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the gallons
show examples
of
water
an
american
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American
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uses without
water
conservation
methods were greater than with
water
conservation
methods.
According to
the given data in the following graph, flushing
toilet
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toilets
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without
water
conservation
was higher than with
water
conservation
by 9%.
Whereas
, people who used leaks was double
than
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that
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with
water
conservation
approaches by 5%.
However
,
both
washing clothes and taking a shower were nearly similar in numbers.
On the other hand
,
both
washing dishes and
others
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other
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uses had
a similar numbers
Correct the article-noun agreement
a similar number
similar numbers
show examples
of
gallon
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gallons
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of
waters
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water
show examples
. Americans used ( 2-1 )
gallons
of
water
respectively in
both
methods.
While
using faucets remained steady and were 11
gallons
of
water
.
Finally
, washing dishes, using faucets
as well as
other uses had a stable number in
both
approches
Correct your spelling
approaches
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, gallons, conservation, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • gallons
  • household
  • laundry
  • irrigation
  • appliances
  • sanitation
  • efficiency
  • trends
  • disparities
  • anomalies
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