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The graph below shows the daily water consumption for Americans in their homes. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when necessary.

The graph below shows the daily water consumption for Americans in their homes. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when necessary.
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This
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 bar chart depicts a comparison of
water
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uses
Correct subject-verb agreement
use
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for
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by
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 Americans in their home. It is measured by
gallons
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 of
water
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.
Overall
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as
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apply
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it can be clearly seen that
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gallons
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the gallons
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 of
water
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 an
american
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American
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 uses without
water
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conservation
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 methods were greater than with
water
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conservation
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 methods.
According to
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 the given data in the following graph, flushing
toilet
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toilets
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 without
water
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conservation
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 was higher than with
water
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conservation
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 by 9%.
Whereas
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, people who used leaks was double
than
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that
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 with
water
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conservation
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 approaches by 5%.
However
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,
both
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 washing clothes and taking a shower were nearly similar in numbers.
On the other hand
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,
both
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 washing dishes and
others
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other
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uses had
a similar numbers
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a similar number
similar numbers
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 of
gallon
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gallons
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 of
waters
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water
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. Americans used ( 2-1 )
gallons
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 of
water
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 respectively in
both
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 methods.
While
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 using faucets remained steady and were 11
gallons
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 of
water
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.
Finally
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, washing dishes, using faucets
as well as
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 other uses had a stable number in
both
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approches
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approaches
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, gallons, conservation, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • gallons
  • household
  • laundry
  • irrigation
  • appliances
  • sanitation
  • efficiency
  • trends
  • disparities
  • anomalies
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