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Some people think that it is a good thing for senior management positions to have much higher salaries than other workers in a company. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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I considered managing to be the most important job in any company, whether the senior or minor management tasks require very unique skills and character, I totally agree with giving a very good and relevant
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 to senior managers, to encourage them to achieve their chores in a perfect way . On the one hand, I disagree with giving them a higher
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 than the other employees because we should have experience and a competitive
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 environment between employees. Rather than, I agree, to give them a suitable
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 their position,
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, extra bonus if they spent more time at
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 or do extra
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 the company may offer them free courses to improve their skills, and other benefits
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 journeys for studying or attend in abroad conferences.
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, we could give the senior managers more extra rewards
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 their efforts, but not give them a higher
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 for nothing, because I believe that
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 indicates many things most of them are your experiences, how long you spent in the company and how positions you had promoted.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Senior management
  • Salary disparity
  • Incentives
  • Income inequality
  • Organizational culture
  • Career progression
  • Employee morale
  • Compensation
  • Financial success
  • Decision-making
  • Responsibility
  • Merit
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