The charts below show the protein and calorie intakes of people in different parts of the world.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the protein and calorie intakes of people in different parts of the world.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the
chart
indicates the different averages of
protein
and calories in four areas,
in addition
, the
chart
ultimates the domination of North
America
however
the peak
point
of
protein
and
calorise
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calories
,
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meanwhile
mainwhile
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while
India is the lowest
point
at only 13 of animals the lowest
point
of both figures, The first
chart
gives the highest number of both types of
protein
(animal and other
protein
) at 62 and 18, respectively.
While
the lowest average
protein
is India at 13 animal
protein
and 15 other
protein
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proteins
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, East Africa gives (16 and 15), and Latin
America
at ( 32 and 13).
On the other hand
, the second
chart
shows the average of calories, obviously the averages are not quite far compared with the
protein
averages,
however
, North
America
still dominates the scene with the peak
point
at 3500
in contrast
, India still has the lowest average at 2000, meanwhile East Africa and Latin
America
reach 2200 and2800 respectively.
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