Some people prefer to spend most of their time with friends. Other people prefer to be alone most of the time. Which way of life do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

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with a
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reason to choose
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children
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just with themself,
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be have a strong personality.
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with life and family and
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friends
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it. In
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could say to believe that
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a
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friends
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their
family because
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for
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psychology and bodies and to do not think and worry about
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am proud of them and everyone can make a chooses.
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Introduction and conclusion should include a clearer statement of your position. Make them more concise yet comprehensive.
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