The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given data demonstrates the place and kinds of dance
classes
that are being participated by youth in Australia.
Overall
, the majority of attendees would instead
engage in private studios than
other locations. Rephrase
rather than
In addition
, most of the under 11 participants attend ballet classes
, while
the highest number of people who are between 11 and 16 years old embark on modern classes
.
Looking at more details about a pie chart, the most popular location for people who dance in Australia is private studios, whereas
a mere one in ten of all attendees participate in college-based studios. This
figure for school halls is approximately a fifth of all dancers.
Moving on to more details about the bar chart, 600 under 11 Australian dancers prefer to attend ballet classes
. In contrast
, this
rate for tap classes
and modern classes
is about 450 and around 300, respectively. Furthermore
, above 500 11 to 16 years old members of the public embark on modern classes
, while
a negligible 300 dancers engage in ballet classes
.
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