Some people feel that fashion is like art and a significant part of society, while others feel that fashion is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Many
people
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argue that
fashion
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plays a crucial role in society, and it
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an art.
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other
people
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believe that
fashion
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waste
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people
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’s
time
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and money. In
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essay, I will discuss both sides of
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issue and suggest that
fashion
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is important in life. Opponents of
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that it can be a huge waste of
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and money. Keeping up with the latest
fashion
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trend
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is
time
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-consuming because we spend a lot of
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browsing a variety of websites to find for ourselves many items of the right price, size, and brand which we want to own, and trends change frequently.
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some
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have the fear of missing out; they purchase so many things that are on sale or limited editions of clothing, but they will not use them.
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, Kido, which is a renowned teenage girl’s brand of clothing in Vietnam, often releases many limited seasonal
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stuff
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such
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as some kinds of
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jacket
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. It makes those customers
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curious and have the fear of missing out if they do not possess these items right now.
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, it is understandable that some
people
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might think that
fashion
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is wasteful. They believed that because they could buy so many stuffs which were on sale or even attractive appearance;
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they
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not use them as these items
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not have
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specific purposes
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and
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bad quality.
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, I firmly believe that
fashion
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is similar to art and can be important for society.
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, sometimes
fashion
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is important to make us
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fit
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in certain situations, to be more polite or formal.
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, when a person has a job interview, it is good for them to wear a
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suit
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or some sophisticated
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. Wearing suitable suits can help them enhance the impression at
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the first
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time
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meeting.
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,
fashion
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helps us to express ourselves
as well as
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our personality
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so that we can feel more confident and powerful, which boosts our mental health as well.
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,
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can
also
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show the cultural civilizations. Each country will have its unique culture of traditional clothing which existed
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so many decades until nowadays. Traditional costumes like a symbol show how their country experienced many ups and downs in history but still
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its unique culture.
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, we can mention some traditional costumes
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as
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“Ao dai” which is a special costume of Vietnamese women, it shows the gentleness, grace, and pure beauty of Vietnamese women. In conclusion,
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there are arguments on both sides, I still believe that
fashion
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somewhat plays an essential part in society, and it
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also
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like art because it can give us a lot of meaningful beauty.

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Provide more specific examples and develop the points further for a richer discussion.
coherence
Improve sentence variety and transitions between points to enhance the logical flow.
task response
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task response
The essay presents a balanced discussion of both views on fashion, effectively addressing the task requirements.
coherence
Introduction and conclusion are clearly defined, providing a structured framework for the essay.
task achievement
The essay includes some relevant examples that help in illustrating the points made.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-expression
  • cultural heritage
  • global economy
  • fast fashion
  • environmental harm
  • consumerism
  • innovation
  • trends
  • superficiality
  • cultural identity
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