The older generations tend to have very traditional idea about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal opinion.
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task achievement
Try to develop each point with more detailed and clear ideas. Introduce both sides of the argument clearly before presenting your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence, supporting sentences with detailed explanations, and, if possible, examples.
coherence cohesion
Work on your sentence structure and grammar to make the essay easier to follow.
task achievement
You have attempted to present both sides of the argument, which is good practice in an essay like this.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
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I am writing this letter to inform you that I saw the advertisement you posted in the job street application. I am interested in the position of teaching your two children to learn Spanish for a year since I'm currently in need of a job.
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