All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that the bad environmental impact of fossil
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cars
.
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cars
should
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rather than burn fossil fuels
cars
, there is
also
an argument that opposes it . In my opinion, I consider that electric
cars
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environmental
impact
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like air pollution and will be
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point in our
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.
To begin
with, the idea of banning all
cars
that burn fossil fuels and replacing them with electric
cars
will decrease the environmental impact But that can’t happen and It will be hard because of The challenges in transitioning to electric
cars
.
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Electric
vehicles
are still relatively expensive compared with traditional
cars
,
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to a lack of enough Infrastructure to support a complete change to electric
vehicles
.
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, individuals in
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regions, buying Electric
vehicles
may not be financially available without significant government financial help. Another point to consider of benefits
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electric
cars
are more environmentally friendly and convenient for many reasons. It is
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work
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on electric energy
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doesn't harm the environment as much as other kinds of
cars
, which decreases the risks of air pollution and other environmental issues.
Moreover
, you can charge them whenever you want at home without the need to drive to the gas station. In conclusion, despite people having different views , I agree with the statement that claims to ban benzine and gas-powered
cars
by governors and to transform to electric-powered
vehicles
. The environmental advantages of battery-driven
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which brings
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positive effects on climate change and pollution levels .
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Consider providing more specific examples or data to strengthen your arguments, particularly when discussing the environmental benefits and challenges of electric vehicles.
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Present your arguments more clearly by structuring paragraphs with a clear topic sentence and support sentences that logically connect back to the main argument.
task achievement
You have clearly stated your opinion on the subject, which enables you to develop your arguments effectively.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, clearly marking the beginning and end of your discussion.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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