It is important for childrean to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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From previous years to nowadays, families teach etic behaviours to their kids, so they start to educate them from an early age. Numerous cultures have their way of showing the difference between yes and no; one method is abusing children, and many societies think it is essential to help them understand the distinction between right and wrong. I strongly agree

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Expand on the essay's main points with clear examples or evidence to strengthen the argument.

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Ensure to address both parts of the task: your opinion on punishment and suggestions for appropriate methods.

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Refine the introductory paragraph to clearly outline what the main argument will cover and make the purpose of the essay clearer.

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Provide smoother transitions between sentences and ideas to enhance coherence and cohesion.

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Conclude the essay with a summary of your arguments and restate your stance clearly.

coherence cohesion

The introduction attempts to establish the context by discussing the importance of teaching children ethical behaviors early on.

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There is a strong expression of opinion which sets a foundation for the essay's argument, showing the student's confidence in addressing the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

83 words

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