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The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban rural households in a certain country that had internet access between 2011 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban rural households in a certain country that had internet access between 2011 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates the proportion of rural/suburban and rural
areas
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 of certain places that
access
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 the
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internet
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Internet
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 between the years 2011 and 2016.
Overall
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, it clearly can be seen that, during the first year until the
last
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 year, household
internet
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access
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 increased dramatically in both
areas
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. In 2011, only 15
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percent
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per cent
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homes
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 of rural/suburban had
internet
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access
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,
while
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 less than 5
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percent
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per cent
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 of rural
homes
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 had it. By following years, in 2012
internet
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access
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 in urban/suburban groups had doubled to 30
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percent
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per cent
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while
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 in rural
homes
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 it rose slightly, to around 5
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percent
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per cent
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. Over the next years, the availability of the
internet
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 experienced a climb in both
areas
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.
Then
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, between 2014 and 2016, the percentage of both
areas
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 with
internet
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 connection remained steady, at close to 50
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percent
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per cent
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. Meanwhile, the percentage of rural
homes
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 continued growing and reached a peak
at
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of
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 35
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percent
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per cent
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 by 2016.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, access, internet, percent, homes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban households
  • suburban households
  • rural households
  • internet access
  • percentage
  • growth rate
  • disparity
  • data trends
  • demographics
  • infrastructure development
  • technology penetration
  • digital divide
  • socioeconomic factors
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