It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives. How could robot be used in the future? Will this be a positive or a negative development?

Because of what
robots
can do these days and how they affect the world by doing
every thing
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people
can do, it is predicted that the number of
robots
will increase in the future and they will take a significant part of our lives. In
this
essay, I will discuss both the positive and negative aspects of robotics. To commence with the positive side,
robots
will do anything in the world. They
are
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will be beneficial ,especially for the difficult
jobs
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a risk
in
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human's
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lives.
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, cleaners will give
robots
their
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jobs
that
is
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required from them to clean
the
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tall buildings.
Additionally
,
robots
can do the work in halved
time
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that takes
from
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humans to do it, as they can produce double the quantity of what humans usually produce. When we talk about
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side,
robots
will take almost all
jobs
from
people
, and
people
will not find a place to earn money
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, and
this
leads
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to a poor community and
people
will struggle to offer essential goods for
them
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and their families.
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, most
of
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workplaces usually make their employees move their bodies,
this
movement is necessary for
individuals'health
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individuals
, and
robots
will lead
people
to become
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lazy and unhealthy. In conclusion,
robots
will control the whole world in the future.
People
can take some
advantages
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from
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them
such
as employing
robots
and they will do whatever
people
want in a short period and perfect results, but for some
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it is a bad invention because
robots
will take their
jobs
and their
life
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will
get
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worsen
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