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The maps below show the changes that occured to na town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. n

The maps below show the changes that occured to na town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. n
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The maps illustrate how the town of Willingston changed over 3 centuries . It is clearly seen that
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 the town experienced significant growth, with the number of houses increasing, new buildings
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 added, and the land space
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 transformed
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convenience
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 places. In 1930, Stokeford was mostly a rural village with large farms and only a few houses along the main road. It had some major places like a primary school, a post office, a few shops, and a big house with gardens. By 2010, Stokeford had grown a lot. Many new houses were built, taking the place of farmland. The big house was turned into a retirement home. The primary school got bigger, with two new buildings added to fit more students.
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 office stayed,
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 the shops were gone. These changes show that the village grew to support more people and to provide care for older residents.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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