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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 graph shows how many people were participants
for
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in
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 five different
acivities
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activities
 at the social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
To begin
with
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with,
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 the information that the popularity of film
club
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clubs
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 and martial arts
were
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was
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deffiently
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definitely
 stable during these periods of time.
Moreover
, the number of participants in
film
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the film
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club
were
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was
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 the
most higher
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highest
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 compared to
others
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other
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 activities for twenty years.
Besides
, the
quantity
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number
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 of members of musical
perfomances
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performances
 began to grow quite
good
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well
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 from 2005 to 2020.
Also
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 the number of participants
of
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in
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 table tennis
were
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was
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 pretty stable from 2000 to 2010, but the demand indicator
of
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for
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this
club
 increased rapidly since 2010.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, there were the
club
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Club
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 of
amateur dramatics
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Amateur Dramatics
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.
According to
 the graph, the quality of members of
this
 activity
rosed
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rose
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 slightly in 2005, but
then
 it fell very much until 2020. In conclusion, I would like to say that the growth and decline of these clubs could depend on their demand in different years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words club with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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