The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter ·say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party ·explain why you won't be able to attend the party ·give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,I got so excited when I saw your letter, I hope everyone in the family doing ok.
firt
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First
of all, I wanted to thank you for inviting me to
Chris
's birthday
party
, you know we have not seen
eachother
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each other
since summer started and school were closed.
Also
, I think
this
is the best idea to surprise
Chris
since he had a very hard school year, I could not see him going out because of all the
homeworks
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homework
and exams, he really needs
some
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party
like
this
with all the people he loves. As
the
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matter of fact, my grandmother
had
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booked her
surjery
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surgery
last
month for June 21st, and I have to go to her city to help her because as you know she does not have anyone who wants to participate in
this
surjery
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surgery
survey
. I am afraid I will not be able to attend
this
party
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Jun 22nd,
although
I have to come back the next week for my late projects, so if there is a way that the
party
could take place in the first week of July, It will be a great opportunity for me to see
Chris
and be one of the people who surprise him and make him happy. thanks again for inviting me and accept my
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, I will call
Chris
and explain it to him after the
party
. give my best to everyone in the family, hope to see you soon.
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sincerely, Parmida.
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logical structure
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suitable writing tone
The tone is friendly and suitable for a letter addressed to parents of a friend, which aligns with the task requirements.
greeting and closing
The opening and closing of the letter are appropriate and courteous, which fits well with the task of writing to a friend's parents.
complete response
The letter successfully addresses all points asked in the task, explaining your absence and proposing another meeting time.
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