The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
the chart shows the
percentages
of the children's journey to their school and classifies four types of
distance
and four types of transportation. at
first,
the chart illustrated that walking dominated at85% septically with short
distances
between 0-1
miles
,
while
with the short
distance
, the average of walking in
distance
between 2-5
miles
was the lowest point,
however
riding a bicycle nearly gave the same range
thus
, the
distance
between 1-2
miles
was dominated at 72%, main
while
the
distance
from 0-1
miles
and 2-5
miles
give approximately the same
percentages
at 50% and 49% respectively.
In addition
, the bus gave high
percentages
with
distances
2.5 and over 5
miles
,
while
gave low
percentages
with short
distances
1-2 and 2-5
miles
at only 5%and 10% respectively, rather than care gave same range with all types of
distances
fluctuated between 10% to 30%, both
distances
from 2-5 and over 5 gave 30%
while
the
distance
between 0-1 was 10% and from 2-5 was 20%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, distance, distances, miles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modes of transportation
  • Percentage
  • Comparative analysis
  • Seasonal variations
  • External factors
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Non-motorized modes
  • Safety
  • Convenience
  • Sustainable
  • Initiatives
  • Promoting
  • Improvements
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